"I love deadlines. I love the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." Douglas Adams (1952 - 2001)
Beautifully stated and perfectly true. We each die a little death ourselves with the loss of a loved one. I used to say after my husband died, the angels had left the house and their going was palpable. Well done, here. Thank you.
Thank you so much for your kind words. The way you describe your house after your husband died, the feeling of the angels' leaving being palpable ... so poignant and authentic. Thank you also for sharing that ...
It all begins with the strength of the first couplet. Wonderfully crafted.
Thank you ... I consider this very high praise coming from you Sam.
yep that is exactly what it feels like...a stone...def a nice play on the triolet...
Thanks Brian - I like when a description matches someone else's take ...
i agree with the comment about the first couplets*****verification makes it really hard to comment. you'd get more comments if you turned it off
Your command of the form is excellent. The emotion is so strong, stretching boundaries of the structure. These lines really stucknwith me:Grief leaves the heartIts chambers fall apartLeaving behind a holeStark, true, evocative of the truth in the experience.
I appreciate your comments Charles; this is a form I like but am still struggling with and these lines in particular are ones that I favoured but was unsure of - so it's very cool to hear from someone as accomplished as you, that they're appropriate here ...
This is so well written and beautiful. I've felt that but never read any poem that expressed it as well as this! Wow.
Thank you so much MM - you are very kind!
Such depth of feeling in your writing...grief is heavy...
Your comment is very much appreciated ... thank you for stopping by.
You did the triolet form honour with your words. The opening couplet is so expressive of pure emotion - very difficult to do.
I thought it was too good to last - Catchpa is back in place today after a commenter's dream day yesterday.
Thanks for persevering with the "captcha" and for your kind comments Viv ... I like this form but find it challenging so am happy when I finally produce something.
like stone upon the soul...what an excellent picture for grief..
Thanks Claudia; I'm glad you think so ...
Interesting - I like the idea of grief going from the heart to the soul.
As do I Mary ... like the idea of grief going from the heart to the soul ... thanks for stopping by
I'd never seen this one before, but it's spot on...Pearl
This is just lovely, Sharon. "Sets like stone upon the soul," indeed. Gorgeous.